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Friday 9 October 2015
#100wc Anna Help me ...please
Help Me…Please
“I’m frightened,” Georgina wept as she saw her mother and
father being terrorised by the war officer for her father had not gone into the
army. “It will be alright” said a quite voice from behind her, it was her
sister Elizabeth. Georgina new her sister was not ok her face was pale and she
was shaking vigorously (and it wasn’t to do with how cold she was because
Elizabeth was wearing a winter coat). “You look frozen” Elizabeth shivered as
she said that because outside the war officer was beating her father, just then
the air raid sound went off and Elizabeth and Georgina ran to the shelter, then
in the middle of the noise a bomb dropped down…
By Anna Morrison
The Underground Valley #100wc
The Underground
Valley
The valley was dark from the outcrops of rock hanging from
the slimy, stone walls. Vines covered the walls and the only plants, where
dying from lack of light. Above was what looked like a miniature window letting
only a small amount of light in. It was cold above, but under the earth it was
freezing. Ash could barely feel his fingers because it was so cold. He saw a
realistic shape of a domestic creature. Ash's heart started pounding he was he
was alone, solo. Carefully he retreated into the dark, looking closely for any
of movement nearby.
Lucia
#100WC Flora
The underground
horses
The world above is
bright and fun with animals kept as pets. But under the earth was different.
Annie loved animals: dogs, cats, rabbits and much more, but what she loved the
most was horses. She had grown up around horses, she had fed and given water to
them, and she had groomed them and always wanted to ride them. Annie was a test
subject, for a scientist to see what down below was like. Annie got down to the
underworld and saw the sandy terrain. Suddenly she saw them, horses all black,
one came over to Annie, she got up on the back of the horse and they rode away
together happily.
Flora
#100wc Footsteps Florence
Footsteps
I sat up and turned on my bedside table lamp. A quiet
whispering noise sent a shiver down my spine. I pulled my bed cover tightly
over me as I heard a noise. Footsteps coming closer every second. My heart was
thumping in my chest, quicker than it had ever done before. I was panicking too
much. I needed to calm myself down, it must have been my wild imagination.
Suddenly the window burst open and the curtains started flapping wildly. The
door handle turned slowly. I pulled myself lower in my bed. Then in the middle
of the noise…
By Florence Jenkins
Adam 100wc week 4
The Jungle
Then in the middle of the noise all of the wild creatures of
the jungle surrounded me. I was surrounded by a diverse amount of different
species. Roars, scratches, squeaks. All of the animals making different noises.
The jungle was a dangerous place to be. I had to find my way out or I would be
eaten alive. I looked at the tiger opposite me. If I didn’t time the jump right
the animals would have dinner early! I ran as fast as I could go and leaped
over the tiger. I sprinted as fast as I could and hid behind a tree. The
animals ran past. I was safe!
Adam N 100wc week 4
#100wc Mia
I had heard it several times now, I was
beginning to feel curious about it. As I lifted my eyes to see where the source
of this raucous, racket was coming from. I saw puffs of grey smoke soaring up
into the sky, I watched it float up to the sky I noticed that the clouds were
no longer white, they were grey clouds of smoke… I now knew that I had clearly
been oblivious to what was happening around me. As the smell slowly drifted
into my lungs, I fell delirious as everything around me slowly disappeared …
By Mia Santos Dendy
#100WC Under The Ground
The underworld
The over world is kind, but under the earth, the world is
gloomy. The spirits of the dead swirl and twirl in the cold air, mourning and
moaning about their death and their
loved ones which they miss dearly. Lingering in the night of this distant world
underground, watches Death, laughing at his captures.
As millennia passes, more people are taken and opportunity
after opportunity to escape is lost. No one who has been taken by Death ever
will come back from this desolate land, especially greedy, thieving people.
They are tortured for eternity, for it is a factor of life.
Matthew
#100wc Under The Ground
I saw the creature. It was large and on its back there were
sharp scales. Its eyes were a deep shade of scarlet which glinted in the
moonlight. It had a long tale, with ruff bumps covering it. Then in the middle
of the noise it sprang at a nearby deer. The deer shot away in terror towards a
clump of bushes a few metres away, the bushes were green and were covered in
juicy red berries. The deer scrambled under the bush to hide. The creature
walked towards the bush, slowly, it’s tale swishing behind as it walked. It
grunted as it grasped the bush.
Lucia
#100wc
I mounted and climbed towards the top of the violent volcano
as it rumbled shaking all of the ground and making millions of tree’s fall. The
rocks tumbled down the hill and wrecked into millions of minute bits of rocks.
I kept on climbing getting higher up until a rock that I was holding onto
popped out with laver flowing out of the hole it made I was so scared. I fell
off and tumbled down the volcano it was too dangerous to climb back up so i ran
away but in the middle if the noise i heard........
Marcus
#100wc
The Aliens
Silently, I opened the package. It was midnight, and the
cardboard box had been given to me that morning. It didn’t say who it was from,
nor did I recognise the handwriting neatly written on the top. I ripped it
open.
It was a shining, slightly transparent cube, which looked
somewhat like a speaker, except with strange symbols roughly drawn all over it.
I, to my mistake, touched it. Suddenly, a loud beeping noise filled my ears.
Out the window, all I could see was a green mist-like smoke, rising from the
road.
Then, in the middle of the noise,
a blue figure appeared, and announced
“I have found them, master”.
Matthew
#100wc Under the ground
The Underground Penguins
Long after the polar ice caps melted, the penguins who once
lived there no longer had their luxurious habitat and so lived in rough,
underground, caverns. The natives who lived above the ground tried to
manipulate the penguins with treats like fish to make the penguins fish for
them with great efficiency. But under the earth, far below the penguins, an
evil penguin eating monster lay, and four years later he awoke in great fury
and devoured all of the penguins until he was full, crunching through the
caves, even the icicles, all of the penguins were eaten except one...
William D
#100wc Under the Ground
Under the ground there is a spooky, mysterious, burning lava
world where no human being is alive. Under the ground there are unusual animals
who can survive the world. You would like to go down there but under the earth
it is a disaster! The burning lava crunches anything in it way and that could
be you who`s life would have been burnt. You go down there and you want to come
back up there`s no way. You’re stuck, you can’t get out your doomed, you’re
lost......
Sam Newby
#110WC In the middle of the noise
Title: The Riders in the Mist
As the battle raged on. The moonlight's shadows went on to
the men who fought for months. Unfortunately and sadly no one got the edge in
the crisis. At first no one heard it. As I tried to go to sleep I heard it the
thud. I sat up. I couldn’t hear it. I put my head on the ground. There were
loads of tiny pitter patters like little rain drops. I stood up. Every one
could hear it now then through the forest plunged horses. With riders and all.
They took the enemy out, I had hope.
By Jack Hyde
#100WC But under the earth
The underground
horses
The world above is
bright and fun with animals kept as pets. But under the earth was different.
Annie loved animals: dogs, cats, rabbits and much more, but what she loved the
most was horses. She had grown up around horses, she had fed and given water to
them, she had groomed them and always wanted to ride them. Annie was a test
subject, for a scientist to see what down below was like. Annie got down to the
underworld and saw the sandy terrain. Suddenly she saw them, horses all black,
one came over to Annie, she got up on the back of the horse and they rode away
together happily.
Flora
Thursday 8 October 2015
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