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Friday, 9 October 2015
#100wc Anna Help me ...please
Help Me…Please
“I’m frightened,” Georgina wept as she saw her mother and
father being terrorised by the war officer for her father had not gone into the
army. “It will be alright” said a quite voice from behind her, it was her
sister Elizabeth. Georgina new her sister was not ok her face was pale and she
was shaking vigorously (and it wasn’t to do with how cold she was because
Elizabeth was wearing a winter coat). “You look frozen” Elizabeth shivered as
she said that because outside the war officer was beating her father, just then
the air raid sound went off and Elizabeth and Georgina ran to the shelter, then
in the middle of the noise a bomb dropped down…
By Anna Morrison
The Underground Valley #100wc
The Underground
Valley
The valley was dark from the outcrops of rock hanging from
the slimy, stone walls. Vines covered the walls and the only plants, where
dying from lack of light. Above was what looked like a miniature window letting
only a small amount of light in. It was cold above, but under the earth it was
freezing. Ash could barely feel his fingers because it was so cold. He saw a
realistic shape of a domestic creature. Ash's heart started pounding he was he
was alone, solo. Carefully he retreated into the dark, looking closely for any
of movement nearby.
Lucia
#100WC Flora
The underground
horses
The world above is
bright and fun with animals kept as pets. But under the earth was different.
Annie loved animals: dogs, cats, rabbits and much more, but what she loved the
most was horses. She had grown up around horses, she had fed and given water to
them, and she had groomed them and always wanted to ride them. Annie was a test
subject, for a scientist to see what down below was like. Annie got down to the
underworld and saw the sandy terrain. Suddenly she saw them, horses all black,
one came over to Annie, she got up on the back of the horse and they rode away
together happily.
Flora
#100wc Footsteps Florence
Footsteps
I sat up and turned on my bedside table lamp. A quiet
whispering noise sent a shiver down my spine. I pulled my bed cover tightly
over me as I heard a noise. Footsteps coming closer every second. My heart was
thumping in my chest, quicker than it had ever done before. I was panicking too
much. I needed to calm myself down, it must have been my wild imagination.
Suddenly the window burst open and the curtains started flapping wildly. The
door handle turned slowly. I pulled myself lower in my bed. Then in the middle
of the noise…
By Florence Jenkins
Adam 100wc week 4
The Jungle
Then in the middle of the noise all of the wild creatures of
the jungle surrounded me. I was surrounded by a diverse amount of different
species. Roars, scratches, squeaks. All of the animals making different noises.
The jungle was a dangerous place to be. I had to find my way out or I would be
eaten alive. I looked at the tiger opposite me. If I didn’t time the jump right
the animals would have dinner early! I ran as fast as I could go and leaped
over the tiger. I sprinted as fast as I could and hid behind a tree. The
animals ran past. I was safe!
Adam N 100wc week 4
#100wc Mia
I had heard it several times now, I was
beginning to feel curious about it. As I lifted my eyes to see where the source
of this raucous, racket was coming from. I saw puffs of grey smoke soaring up
into the sky, I watched it float up to the sky I noticed that the clouds were
no longer white, they were grey clouds of smoke… I now knew that I had clearly
been oblivious to what was happening around me. As the smell slowly drifted
into my lungs, I fell delirious as everything around me slowly disappeared …
By Mia Santos Dendy
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